21 January 2009

Work in progress

Sam has agreed to share his work in progress for our first critique on the blog.

"The Punks"

Post your comments, remember no last names. Rules for critique on the blog are the same as in class but remember humor does not work as well when written as when spoken.


sam said...

Sam- When designing the color scheme for this piece, I thought about using only black and white but soon added other colors such as red so it wouldn't be mixed with the in progress "Goth" piece.
I plan on making the background darker with charcoal in order to contrast the "whites", lights, in the piece.

Jacqueline Ryanne said...

Your use of line is strong because it is so repetitive. It is also contradicting because it conveys a certain energy, almost chaotic-like because of its jaggedness, and yet it's so orderly in the lines of the pants and tree, which I think is a neat outcome.

m debello said...

I wonder if some of the "chaotic-like" lines that Jackie remarked on fit with the picture in more than just a visual sense. Would they fit with the culture of "punk"?

Katie said...

Ahh, Sam. I do not think I can ever get over how anyone could look at one of your pieces and just say, "Yeah, that is totally Sam's."

You have this style that is your own, and you have worked on it to improve on it and become more comfortable with it. Yet, at the same time, you keep evolving in it (such as the new concept of color in your artwork, which is not too shabby, by the way). Your use of line, depth, and the mdeia of pen is inspiring. I can not wait to see it after you have added the charcoal.

I also like how you have incorperated culture into your piece. It helps people who view your artwork to have insight on how you see the culture around you.

Anonymous said...


I agree with everyone above has said. I also like the incoperation of color because I know last year the majority of his stuff was black and whit or blue and white. This peice and the others more recently are colored graphically which I think carries the around and adds distinction to the seperate parts of the works. The shading is great as well.

sam said...

Actually I purposely used orderly slanted, vertical, and horizontal lines in correspondence to the "jagged" lines. The reason for this is that I wanted to use the lines to show how "punks" are consider in the eyes of society as those of anarchy who go against the order of society.

Kalee said...

I have to say that the jagged, chaotic lines Sam used does represent the "punk" culture. Like he said, punks are usually the ones who go against the order of society, and by having the straight, orderly lines be compared to the jagged lines, Sam was able to show how the punks are seen as the abnormals in our society.

I also have to agree with Katie when she said that how Sam has grown and added color to his work his pieces have gotten better, not that they weren't great before. Now his figures really come to life and seem to jump off the page. For example, the pinks he used in their clothing and the anarchy symbol really make the punks seem to vibrate almost with this "in your face" kind of aura.

Overall, this is a great piece, but I think Sam's plan for adding more darks to really highlight the lights will make it an awesome finished piece.

Monica said...

I like how your pieces always have a quality of illumination that lights up your subjects. You do contrast really well.
My only concern with this is piece is how much of a culture Punk and Goth is. Could you explain this choice to me? Do you expect to explore these same "cliques" in other cultures?

Krystal said...

In one of the research projects that was available at the beginning of the year there was a topic that explored why artists contniue to do portraits in the age of photography, and I think Sam's piece almost answers that question.

Yes, there is an element of photolike accuracy in the proportions of the "Punks", but the ink piece captures more- it has a mood and atmoshphere that individual artists percieve differently- I catch that in Sam's use of dark colors. For example, there is a sort of twisted "the grass is always green" with the use of pen to make the grass reflect the punks attitude -dark, brooding, etc.

The intricate attention to color also shows the dedication the artist has to the work- like the various shades of green in the grass.

I agree with everyone when they compliment Sam in his lines- they are dynamic and have energy, like Jacqueline said.

The only things that worries me is are you, Sam, trying to capture the true punks or pop culture/ stereotypical punks/goth, because I think they are as much different as the same.

Oh, and if you do put the characoal I recomend being careful because there has to be the right amount of balance. I agree dark, dark black is needed, but if it is put too close to the other dark regions than it will overpower Sam's artwork too much- I think. Sam always makes it work, but there is my opinion.

m debello said...

If you could, Sam, maybe a brief explanation of your investigation and what you want to accomplish with this first piece might be helpful to put it in context. I believe Sam is planning on looking at what ties different groups/cultures/sub-cultures together. Am I correct?

Vanessa said...

This piece portrays punk culture mostly through the jagged lines. I disagree with Monica because "Punk" and "Goth" are cultures/subcultures. Sam's use of energetic line defines the culture. Punks are similar to Goths except punks have a lot more energy. The use of vivid color as well as the line defines the piece as punk culture. If Sam ever wanted to make a Gothic piece lines that are not as expressive, calm, and mellow lines would allow the viewer to see the difference between cultures. A lack in vivid color for a Gothic piece would also help with distinguishing between cultures.

The only thing that bothers me about this piece is that the rocks look so tangible due to the amazing shading; the tree trunk in front looks real, but put against the rocks it looks a bit placed instead of being naturally there. Maybe a little bit more shading on the trunk would fix that. Other than, that with more shading your work is a very strong piece.

sam said...

Well my concentration is on the concept of "cliques", not culture that is being overly-stated, as a means for someone to have a place in a group where they share common interest because that is what defines a clique. In my first pieces i would like to start out with the stereotypical forms of the "cliques" that comes to mind when the word "clique" is spoken: punks, goths, preps, what so ever... I then plan to further develop the idea into others that also come together because of common interest such as the unknown cliques in society including those of foreign origins such as myself that organize meetings because we share the same Nigerian "culture", as in simply being born in Nigeria, nothing else.
So i would like to say again I am not capturing "culture", I could careless for it, only the meaning of "cliques" as a form of human interaction to avoid solitude, loneliness, even as much as Goths like to be "alone" they hang around others that look like them.

sam said...

and those aren't rocks at the back, they are bushes, why would boulders have curly like lines in them?

Nicole said...

They do look like boulders, especially with the anarchy symbol. It looks like they spraypainted it on.
Anyways, As for the whole arguement over punks and goths...Its clear that Sam was trying to show the idea of "punks" through the way he had them dressed and posed.
As for the jagged lines that Sam used, to me it looks almost as if everything is in movement. I'm not sure if this was intended, but movement also corresponds with "punks" because they are generally classified as always running around getting into trouble.
This is an amzing piece. Sam has some talent, and I admire the time that he put into this to put in that much detail.

Stephanie said...

I've noticed in your pieces that you have a unique style and method of creating your lines. They are jagged and messy,(in a good way) much like a sketch. Your lines tend to convey a certain energy. This works well with your theme of 'cliques', especially your punk and gothic pieces that convey a sense of chaos, anarchy, and rebellion. It would be interesting to see what you would do with 'preps' of you still plan to carry out with that idea.

Your use of line creates an implied movement. Almost like a blur.

You may want to add color to your bushes. I think that people say they look like boulders because they are too 'squared-off' at the top and by the anarchy symbol. Additional lines and values would make the bushes look less like boulders by bringing out the implied texture of the leaves.

Overall, through your special attention to contrast and line, I can see this as being a strong first piece.

chandler said...

I think that this is a very strong piece because the jagged lines and the faces of the punks look a little bit like a japanese cartoon; however, the shading and the perspective of the piece makes it look like something an art student did and not a middle schooler. I like the fact that you are working out of your element and applying color to your work. I also like the overall idea of you investigation and I think that this is a really strong first piece for you.

I think that I would like to see a little but more done with the background, maybe use some color to shade instead of black and gray. I also think it would be a good idea for you to slow down and focus on some minor details, like the faces of the boys. You also seem to have a thing for working in different angles, like your foot view on your self portrait. I think that you should continue that work.